Vibe check

• Is it heading in the right direction?
• Do we need need to clean up grammar or structure as it gets in the way of comprehension.
  • Only bother with this if it’s get in the way of basic comprehensions of what I’m saying!
• What type of questions do you have asked, annoyed?
  • The relationship with narrator and the story.
  • Oscar and Jireh and Wahala!
  • Jireh and Angie and their families and their relationships - it seems interesting!
• Where would you like it to go?

• [ ] I don’t think I’ll do character introductions like I was going to do - feels a bit borderlands, and not quite what I’m doing here.
• [ ] Do Better transitions between things
• [ ] Circle analogy was good - jessie liked it, though I thought this would be a bit too high brow. interesting!

• Callum’s Feedback

• Jessie Feedback

Malachi thoughts

• Do I want to have nore story elements like I do for the first chapter, or more genre and trope. I think I want the 2nd as it ties in with them better.
• I don't want Jireh making stories about individuals, as he's already yelling his memoir so that keeps us in the story better
• I could use the story heavy writing for start of acts, as that's quite a nice way to break it up.